This essay is about the online K-pop community and how they contributed to the death of a K-pop idol named Sulli. I think I would give this essay a 90% overall rating. I feel as though the author did a good enough job but I had some minor issues with certain things. I feel as though they didn’t provide enough background context to really give the reader a deeper understanding of the Kpop community. For example, they only mentioned the “Hallyu Wave” in the beginning but did not bother to explain what this is. That said though, I think they did a good job with the overall structure and development of the essay. I feel like each paragraph has a separate idea that is still connected to the main idea, and it makes the essay, easy to read.